【英语】2019届二轮复习书面表达普通书信电子邮件(二)写作指导例析（3页word版） 3页

‎2019届二轮复习书面表达普通书信/电子邮件(二)写作指导例析 假如你是李华。上周你们学校举行了秋季运动会，请给你的美国笔友Jack写一封回信，介绍你和你们班同学参加运动会的情况和感受。‎ 写作要点如下：‎ ‎1．运动会项目多，组织好；‎ ‎2．你参加比赛的情况；‎ ‎3．同学们运动会期间的表现；‎ ‎4．你对这次运动会的感受。‎ 注意：1.可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；‎ ‎2．词数100左右，开头及结尾已给出，不计入总词数；‎ ‎3．不能使用真实姓名和学校名称。‎ Dear Jack，‎ How nice to hear from you again！　‎ ‎　 ‎ ‎　 ‎ ‎　 ‎ ‎　 ‎ Yours truly，‎ Li Hua ‎[四步写作]‎ 一、定人称、定时态，审题快而不偏 人称以第一人称为主，主要时态用一般过去时 二、列提纲、准写词，要点全而不漏 ‎1．运动会项目多，组织好 ‎①组织好的 wellorganized ‎②项目 event ‎2．你参加比赛的情况 ‎①参加 take_part_in ‎②冲过终点线 pass_the_finishing_line ‎3．同学们运动会期间的表现 ‎①加油 cheer_on ‎②为……赢得荣誉 win_honor_for ‎4．你对这次运动会的感受 ‎①成功 success ‎②组织更多这样的活动 organize_more_activities_like_this 三、由词汇、组成句，表达亮而不俗 ‎1．让我来告诉你一些上周在我们学校举行的运动会的情况。‎ Let me tell you something about the sports meeting held in our school last week.‎ ‎2．我参加了400米比赛，最终我第三个通过了终点线。‎ I took part in the 400 metres and finally I was the third one who passed the finishing line.‎ ‎3．每个运动员都尽自己的最大努力为班级赢得荣誉。‎ Each player tried his best to win honor for his class.‎ ‎4．由于我们的努力，我们班获得了第一名。‎ Thanks to our efforts, our class won the first place.‎ ‎5．运动会很成功，我希望将来可以组织更多这类活动。 ‎ The sports meeting was a great success and I hope more activities like this can be organized in the future.‎ 四、衔接词、巧串联，佳作顺而不乱 用适当的衔接词串句成文 Dear Jack，‎ How nice to hear from you again！Let me tell you something about the sports meeting held in our school last week.‎ The sports meeting was wellorganized. There were a number of events to choose from, such as basketball, badminton, 400 metres and so on.‎ I took part in the 400 metres and finally I was the third one who passed the finishing line. My classmates cheered the players on and each player tried his best to win honor for his class. Thanks to our efforts, our class won the first place.‎ The sports meeting was a great success and I hope more activities like this can be ‎ organized in the future.‎ Yours truly，‎ Li Hua ‎ ‎[写改两用]‎ 这是根据本题目学生完成的一篇习作，文中有10处错误，请改正。‎ Dear Jack，‎ How nice to hear from you again! Last week we have a sports meeting. Though the weather wasn’t very fine that day, but the students were all very exciting.‎ The sports meeting had many event and was wellorganized. Many students just watched them, some of whom was busy writing articles about it. The relay races, which I took part, were very exciting. Though we didn’t win a first place, we were still very happily.This is because many of my classmates tried their best at the sports meeting and they got lot of good places. They were all best in my eyes. I was thankful to they for doing their best for our class.‎ Yours truly，‎ Li Hua ‎ 答案：第二句：have→had 第三句：去掉but; exciting→excited 第四句：event→events 第五句：was→were 第六句：part后加in 第七句：a→the; happily→happy 第八句：lot前加a或lot→lots 第十句：they→them